Thanks to SergeyMusin for permission to use his powerful “Deadly Shadow At Necropolis”!
Note: I started this story from one of the young "dorlen" boy's POV a few days ago, but it wasn't really working for me. I decided to let this one percolate for a bit, and thought I'd try writing from the sentinel's POV instead. What do you think?
My steps were the only sound echoing off the moonlit walls as I followed
my endless path through the city’s streets. When I reached the square, I would
stand sentinel in the moonlight and recharge the jooln that ran red through my
channels and fed my my central power source. I felt no fatigue in this body,
but my sensors reported power was below optimal, and the full moon would
provide plenty of light.
Once stationed in the square, I leaned against my staff and felt the
thrum of power as it, too soaked in the moonlight. The jooln began to pulse
throughout my body, and I almost remembered sensations of long ago, when I was
alive. In my mind, I reached out for the memories, but they disappeared like
smoke before the barrel of my forearm.
A scuff, then silence. I didn’t need to move to expand my senses,
seeking the intruder. Likely some desert kaptil had wandered too far afield,
and an auditory shrill would send it scurrying on six legs back into the silent
sands. I scanned the area with night vision and found three dorlens crouching
on the steps of the far building, hiding behind a line of power cells. I
frowned. Did the fools think they would be safe there?
As I started toward them, clouds filled the sky, dimming the moonlight.
I heard the first sounds of movement and knew I had little time. I raced toward
the hidden trio and leaped up the steps, just as I sensed the others
approaching. Sweeping my staff in an arc before them, I pulled up
long-forgotten speech. “You dare? Noone enters the Necropolis. You know the
penalty?”
The tallest dorlen moved in front of the other two. My sensors showed
his fear, but he stood tall, reaching his empty hands toward me. “Please…please
let my brothers go. I will pay the penalty—”
“Jarron, no!” one of the other dorlens shouted.
I frowned. Brothers? Memories…
I straightened and struck the step with my staff. Turning from them, I
ground out, “Stay. Close. I lead. Out.” They did not follow when I started down
the steps, and I stopped, turning back to them. I felt the smile on my face,
but I knew it did not look like it once did. Speech came faster now. “Do you think
I guard those who live here? Sentinels protect the living. Come.”
I turned and continued down the steps. It was up to them to follow me,
or die…
To be continued?
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And so, with a loving
heart, I offer you
Namaste
I’ve heard many
translations. Here’s one I love:
The light of the universe that shines within me recognizes
the light of the universe that shines within you.
The light of the universe that shines within me recognizes
the light of the universe that shines within you.
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Dogs in House
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Houdini
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Writing report:
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Time: ~20min
I like this one! A lot more mystery, I think, then the last one. It gives the sense of a much deeper story from the start, whereas the other looked more like a theif's folly, and perhaps a lighter tale.
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Writing report:
ReplyDeleteNovel editing, Ch 37
Tme: ~10min