tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3022413452547277809.post509821192511503815..comments2023-07-06T07:33:06.262-04:00Comments on * Writers' Spark * Every story has to start somewhere *: Passport, Part 2Unknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3022413452547277809.post-40595812013850281402013-01-20T20:51:33.698-05:002013-01-20T20:51:33.698-05:00Hi Kate, good question! That's specific to the...Hi Kate, good question! That's specific to the Poovians, which is why the port "customs" agent is surprised that she knows it - though we see her think about a former Poovian lover. SO yes, beyond this planet, but only w/that species. She'll interact with another one soon, off planet. I already have a couple more scenes in the work for Alivia. I like her! I think this is a short story, with potential for more down the road...Margaret S. McGrawhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18301618521427459626noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3022413452547277809.post-26468017813699506532013-01-19T21:23:06.814-05:002013-01-19T21:23:06.814-05:00I love the culture-building you've been doing....I love the culture-building you've been doing. Is the blink/gesture system used beyond this planet? Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04739546442661093275noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3022413452547277809.post-91159255386191573952013-01-16T15:25:06.823-05:002013-01-16T15:25:06.823-05:00Hi, Chris, thanks for your feedback! I appreciate ...Hi, Chris, thanks for your feedback! I appreciate it.Margaret S. McGrawhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18301618521427459626noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3022413452547277809.post-6294517122930159672013-01-16T12:30:13.729-05:002013-01-16T12:30:13.729-05:00Hi Margaret, I like the "I had a man to kill&...Hi Margaret, I like the "I had a man to kill" A page turner comment. The aliens are fine. What is the city like? I suppose those descriptions would be fleshed out later. You have some great ideas. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14865470855526020691noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3022413452547277809.post-81586084284827359982013-01-16T11:55:52.906-05:002013-01-16T11:55:52.906-05:00I see that Blogger moved the original Passport blo...I see that Blogger moved the original Passport blog to the top when I went in to fix an error I had found. Grr. <br /><br />The perils of posting in pieces - I edited the 1st part to use a little scanner - about the size of a lip balm tube - to hold identity info. That's what she's handing to the porter etc. But then she is using the neural net to give them tips.Margaret S. McGrawhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18301618521427459626noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3022413452547277809.post-67152591169636137062013-01-16T11:51:24.796-05:002013-01-16T11:51:24.796-05:00So, what do you think of this little interlude?
...So, what do you think of this little interlude? <br /><br />Too many aliens? Do they work for you?<br /><br />Is the neural net clear enough? You don't have to understand how it works, mind you, just be able to accept that it's there...<br /><br />What about the spoiler alert at the end? Good? Or is it better to just jump into the action in the next scene?<br /><br />I'll love to hear your thoughts on this!Margaret S. McGrawhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18301618521427459626noreply@blogger.com